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May. 2nd, 2006 @ 12:02 pm Never the Same
Current Mood: creative
This really has nothing to do with any of the challenges, but I wrote a poem recently and figured I'd post it. Enjoy! :)

All that I was,
Every part of me,
Is no longer,
What I know I will be

Times have changed,
And people too.
How I wish to go back
And be with you.

I said I loved you,
Time and again.
But I was too young
To understand it then.

Now that I’ve grown,
In the years that have passed,
It becomes harder to make
Your memory last.

Your voice is fading,
Your eyes growing gray,
My sanity leaving,
Bit by bit every day.

The pain I can’t shake,
Though I try and I try,
Is that, which I feel,
From not saying goodbye.

Days have flown by,
All meshed into one.
I pretend to be happy,
But that truly is gone.

I can see it around me,
Nothing’s the same.
And though the tears do dry,
The grief just remains.
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Beach '10
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Date:May 2nd, 2006 05:44 pm (UTC)
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Wow. That was really sad, and also really good. I liked the last verse the best, though I couldn't tell you why.

All I'd suggest is maybe read through it again because there are two verses that don't seem to follow the same pattern as the rest of them. Three and Six, I think, don't flow quite as well.

Still, really good. I'm jealous of your poetry. Very nice. :)
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Date:May 2nd, 2006 06:19 pm (UTC)
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why thank you. :) i'll look over them and revise!
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Date:May 3rd, 2006 04:26 am (UTC)
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That's really good and yeah, I agree - it is sad. But I think it can transcend barriers and mean different things to differnt people - the lost off a friend, of a loved one etc and the pain that stays. Very cool.
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Date:May 3rd, 2006 12:23 pm (UTC)
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thank you. :)